it seems both overly melodramatic and too sentimental
GAWD FORBID! YOU WILL NEVER FIND AN AUDIENCE FOR THAT AROUND THESE HERE PARTS.
(The last person I betaed for wrote this fantastic 500-word aside (about Roy Mustang being confused by small children...) and shot it to me in an email, saying, "I really love this, but I think I should leave it out; it's really self-indulgent." Naturally, I told her, "You're right, it is awesome. IF YOU CANNOT BE SELF-INDULGENT IN FANFIC, WHERE THE HELL CAN YOU BE?" *sings at you:* Bring me your poor, your tired, your overwrought and soppy!)
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GAWD FORBID! YOU WILL NEVER FIND AN AUDIENCE FOR THAT AROUND THESE HERE PARTS.
(The last person I betaed for wrote this fantastic 500-word aside (about Roy Mustang being confused by small children...) and shot it to me in an email, saying, "I really love this, but I think I should leave it out; it's really self-indulgent." Naturally, I told her, "You're right, it is awesome. IF YOU CANNOT BE SELF-INDULGENT IN FANFIC, WHERE THE HELL CAN YOU BE?" *sings at you:* Bring me your poor, your tired, your overwrought and soppy!)